Thoughts on this poem I have written?

Believe me, I read many many poems a week, and it's so nice to read something by someone who really understands what poetry is--------it's a way to affect people on another level. The imagery is really good, and you can see the little girl grasping the stars, and there's the hint that she may be sick. You've used internal rhyme in your first line with couch, and crouch, as well as alliteration. Title suggestion----''THE CHAIRUB" a play on words for cherub since shes's sitting and sleeping on the couch. To me this makes all the reading worthwhile--because it gets to me. Great Job-------------------------------------…